The hermit

Jun. 10th, 2005 11:14 am
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Few old folks live on Kingsmill Avenue anymore. One by one the small, tired houses pass on and receive renovations, new rooms budding off the sides like embryonic cells.

Halfway down the block lives a hermit. Maple saplings shroud the windows of his house. The backyard is shady as a tomb.

Last night I walked shirtless down the street, savouring the stillness against my skin. A dark sky embraced the city, few stars penetrating the sodden darkness. Distant lightning prickled, while televisions cast manic lights across inner walls. Air conditioners breathed like oxygen machines alongside houses. The trees stood still as tombstones. A feline shadow slipped across the sidewalk and vanished. In the turnaround at the bottom of the street two young people sat talking and laughing in a car.

With the avenue otherwise empty, the hermit had come out to sweep his front walk. I crossed the street to avoid startling or disturbing him. Clothes hung on his tall frame like rags on a skeleton. His head was bent in shadow. He attacked the front steps with a broom, as if scouring with steel wool. His porch light glared at the neighbours, but the house behind was closed, blind.

Date: 2005-06-10 03:37 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] artricia.livejournal.com
This is a stellar piece of writing. I'm really moved.

Date: 2005-06-10 03:50 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] poetbear.livejournal.com
a powerful piece of writing, Van.
~paul

Date: 2005-06-10 10:16 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] detailbear.livejournal.com
It's very evocative. You stimulate my visual cortex with your words.

Date: 2005-06-11 01:24 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] vaneramos.livejournal.com
Thank you. I performed the uncommon exercise of rewriting something from my handwritten morning pages. I'm glad you enjoyed this piece.

Date: 2005-06-11 01:25 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] vaneramos.livejournal.com
Thanks Paul, I always appreciate your comments.

Date: 2005-06-11 01:25 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] vaneramos.livejournal.com
Thanks Kevin. Sensual detail is the key.

Date: 2005-06-11 02:54 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] poetbear.livejournal.com
yvw~paul
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