Birth of a lake
Apr. 25th, 2003 10:40 am![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png){kind=small}
vaneramosIn the beginning
was an end.
Out of darkness
came light.
Over the fall of hills
climbed a ribbon of wind.
Out of silence
came endless music.
The void shattered
and mystery split open.
In a fold of the earth
lay a blue breadth of sky.
From the surface
came forth angelic beings
transparent
dancing to the song of atmosphere.
Children of the afterbirth
giants rose from the shore
limbs lucent and shuddering with dew
from their hearts
whispered dreams beyond memory.
Serenely the depths
swelled with secret wisdom
and death was forgotten.
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I would appreciate constructive criticism of this poem. I have one particular problem with it, but will wait to hear what others have to say.
Here's a list of all my poetry published on this site to date: Van's poems.
was an end.
Out of darkness
came light.
Over the fall of hills
climbed a ribbon of wind.
Out of silence
came endless music.
The void shattered
and mystery split open.
In a fold of the earth
lay a blue breadth of sky.
From the surface
came forth angelic beings
transparent
dancing to the song of atmosphere.
Children of the afterbirth
giants rose from the shore
limbs lucent and shuddering with dew
from their hearts
whispered dreams beyond memory.
Serenely the depths
swelled with secret wisdom
and death was forgotten.
~~~~
I would appreciate constructive criticism of this poem. I have one particular problem with it, but will wait to hear what others have to say.
Here's a list of all my poetry published on this site to date: Van's poems.
