Simmer in my mind

[vaneramos]

underneath the emperor's new clothes
here: inside the body of our ancestor
he was all about me

i tried to get him to go a shade lighter
to climb into the sky repeatedly

stumbled into a throng of
magpie daemons in my mind
further from the tree that was their origin

too much like a hysterical housewife
i was barely able to contain my laughter
went storming up the long lane
far outside the city lights

we looked at the flowers again
picked a few more dandelions
planted some of those sunflower seeds
but somehow there is an emptiness

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I liked this exercise so much two weeks ago that I did it again: picked phrases from my friends' journals and used them to construct a poem. It was a much different experience this time because I have started to get to know people better. Looking at the poem, I can remember what most of the lines meant in their original context. They belong with different people and stories. It feels rich.

It's also a good exercise for learning to work with words and images. I remembered to pick more verb phrases this time. I like the result better.

Here's a list of poems I've posted on LJ so far: Van's poetry.